[Essay] Is this a good thesis?

[NINER69]

Hello,

I am working on a paper and I have composed a thesis. I don't really trust my writing so I would like to request for a teacher to check to see if my thesis is good or not. Is it too long? Any feedback will be much appreciated. Here is my thesis:


Although it does not always guarantee a positive change of attitude, studies show that intercultural communication between tourists and the local population can enhance positive attitudes because it creates mutual understanding, and minimizes stereotyping and discrimination.

Thank you!

 

[tedmc]

It does not look like the title of a thesis.

How about:

The positive changes of attitudes resulting from intercultural communication between tourists and the local populace/people.

Your thesis is to carry out the study to verify the proposition, study the effects, etc. , which is usually a statement and not a sentence and does not contain details.

 

[Tdol]

I would not begin with the although part.