[Grammar] Inform my manager about my leave

[mammumia]

Hi ,
Kindly, be informed about my leave for the month of October
I would be on vacation with my family starting from 12[SUP]th[/SUP] Oct to 16[SUP]th[/SUP] Oct.

Thanks & Regards,

 

[teechar]

[STRIKE]Hi ,[/STRIKE]
Kindly, be informed [STRIKE]about my leave for the month of October
I would[/STRIKE] that I will be on vacation with my family [STRIKE]starting[/STRIKE] from the 12[SUP]th[/SUP] of Oct to the 16[SUP]th[/SUP] of Oct.

Thanks and my best regards,

It's not appropriate to address your manager with "Hi."
Consider, e.g.,

Dear Mrs Jones,
or
Dear Dr Flynn,
or
Dear Jim, [If you're on first-name terms with your manager]

 

[MikeNewYork]

In AmE, would normally say from the 12th of Oct. through the 16th of Oct.

 

[emsr2d2]

In BrE, we don't use "through" that way. To make it clear that the holiday dates are to include October 16th, we would say "Please note/consider my application for leave from October 12th to October 16th inclusive".