ziawj2
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There are some choppy sentences. I made some changes to improve them. Please help me check them or give me your advice. Thank you!
1) Original:She was dressed in gray pants and a turtleneck. She looked somewhat like a university student.
Revised: When she dressed in gray pants and a turtleneck, she looked somewhat like a university student.
2) A couple of newspapers offered space on their pages. At least some of our reporters could get their stories publised.
Revised: A couple of newspapers offered space on their pages to have some of our reporters publish their stories.
3) He did not go to work. He felt bad.
He did not go to work for he felt bad.
4) Sherman was 60. He finally got his driver's license.
Although Sherman was 60, he finally got his driver's license.
5) The double-decker airplane will be the world's largest passenger plane. It will be roomy enough for you to stretch out.
As the world's largest passenger plane, the doublt-decker will be roomy enough for you to stretch out.
1) Original:She was dressed in gray pants and a turtleneck. She looked somewhat like a university student.
Revised: When she dressed in gray pants and a turtleneck, she looked somewhat like a university student.
2) A couple of newspapers offered space on their pages. At least some of our reporters could get their stories publised.
Revised: A couple of newspapers offered space on their pages to have some of our reporters publish their stories.
3) He did not go to work. He felt bad.
He did not go to work for he felt bad.
4) Sherman was 60. He finally got his driver's license.
Although Sherman was 60, he finally got his driver's license.
5) The double-decker airplane will be the world's largest passenger plane. It will be roomy enough for you to stretch out.
As the world's largest passenger plane, the doublt-decker will be roomy enough for you to stretch out.