[General] If you wish to

[Silverobama]

Hi.

I wonder if the following sentence is natural. Would native speaker use it?

If you wish to succeed, you should use persistence as your good friend, experience as your reference, prudence as your brother and hope as your sentry.

I think it's not natural at all.

 

[tedmc]

I think it is okay to have the four qualities contributing to success personified.

 

[teechar]

If you wish to succeed, you [STRIKE]should use[/STRIKE] need persistence, [STRIKE]as your good friend,[/STRIKE] experience, [STRIKE]as your reference,[/STRIKE] prudence [STRIKE]as your brother[/STRIKE] and hope. [STRIKE]as your sentry.
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Try that.