Dijaa
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I'm preaparing for ielts and I need you to correct the essay I wrote as an answer to the following topic:
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In our days, education aspects are changed in Morocco. Some people think that we have to develop a sense of competition in children, others believe that children must co-operate for being a useful adult. I think that both of these points of view of people have some advantages and some disadvantages. In the following I will discuss each one and I will give my take on this topic.
From the one side, what are the good things that will happen if a sense of competition is developed in children? I think that the productivity of child will raise and he will reach his aims. For instance, in school responsables can organise some artistic, sportive, or scientific competition and they encourage students to participate, so everyone will try to do his best to win and this will push him to learn more about that activity and may be he will take courses to develop his self and show others that he’s the best. However, if children be more competitive he can will be like a robot; he try just to execute tasks that he is given and will lose his spirit of analyze and also he will be selfish.
From the other side, I believe that teaching children to co-operate with each other in order to be a useful adult has also some advantages and disadvantage. Children will have the ability to work in a group and to share informations with colleagues, so they will have a team spirit and that’s crucial for their professional life in the future when they will be adults. Moreover, the intelligence of children differ from one to others and if they work with each other they will complete each other and we will have good results. However, co-operate in continue will not allow children to be independent and he will be always influenced by the opinions of their colleagues.
To summarize, I’m agree with the idea of children must co-operate rather than compete. Nobody is perfect, and nobody can know everything but anyone know something about everything so if children co-operate they can bring an important things and complete the knowledge of each other.
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In our days, education aspects are changed in Morocco. Some people think that we have to develop a sense of competition in children, others believe that children must co-operate for being a useful adult. I think that both of these points of view of people have some advantages and some disadvantages. In the following I will discuss each one and I will give my take on this topic.
From the one side, what are the good things that will happen if a sense of competition is developed in children? I think that the productivity of child will raise and he will reach his aims. For instance, in school responsables can organise some artistic, sportive, or scientific competition and they encourage students to participate, so everyone will try to do his best to win and this will push him to learn more about that activity and may be he will take courses to develop his self and show others that he’s the best. However, if children be more competitive he can will be like a robot; he try just to execute tasks that he is given and will lose his spirit of analyze and also he will be selfish.
From the other side, I believe that teaching children to co-operate with each other in order to be a useful adult has also some advantages and disadvantage. Children will have the ability to work in a group and to share informations with colleagues, so they will have a team spirit and that’s crucial for their professional life in the future when they will be adults. Moreover, the intelligence of children differ from one to others and if they work with each other they will complete each other and we will have good results. However, co-operate in continue will not allow children to be independent and he will be always influenced by the opinions of their colleagues.
To summarize, I’m agree with the idea of children must co-operate rather than compete. Nobody is perfect, and nobody can know everything but anyone know something about everything so if children co-operate they can bring an important things and complete the knowledge of each other.
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