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Many politicians want every teenager to do a 12-month community service,
but should the teenagers be forced to do this ?
One the one hand the community service would instill good values to the teenagers and
when the community service introduces them to this kind of activity early, the teenagers
will find it more natural to do this in later life, in addition the teenagers will help people in
need, furthermore it would build character and self esteem and help them to prepare
for real life, also it helps the kids experiment with new experiences, to broaden their skills
and knowledge.
One the other hand it takes to much time and some teenagers may truly need to stay
focussed on homework and school , and then the community service would become
a distraction for them and maybe the the commuinity service is boring for the teenager,
which would turn them off to furhter community service work later. in addition the
community service could take place in a a bad neighborhood, where crime, drugs and
violence are more likely, increasing risk for the teenagers.
Personally, I believe that you should force a teenager to do community service, because
it would be hard for him to care for the community service and school.
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but should the teenagers be forced to do this ?
One the one hand the community service would instill good values to the teenagers and
when the community service introduces them to this kind of activity early, the teenagers
will find it more natural to do this in later life, in addition the teenagers will help people in
need, furthermore it would build character and self esteem and help them to prepare
for real life, also it helps the kids experiment with new experiences, to broaden their skills
and knowledge.
One the other hand it takes to much time and some teenagers may truly need to stay
focussed on homework and school , and then the community service would become
a distraction for them and maybe the the commuinity service is boring for the teenager,
which would turn them off to furhter community service work later. in addition the
community service could take place in a a bad neighborhood, where crime, drugs and
violence are more likely, increasing risk for the teenagers.
Personally, I believe that you should force a teenager to do community service, because
it would be hard for him to care for the community service and school.
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did you find any gramatically mistakes or misspelling ?
what could i do better, do you have any tips, please ?