hardyweineberg
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These sentences are from my essay.
"However, the western road and parts of the eastern one have been destroyed to provide space for a road bridge almost spanning the width of the area and providing access to a city."
"Apartment buildings have been built north of the river, many houses have been erected east of the river, and after the group of houses present in 1965 have been rebuilt east of the remaining part of the eastern road, a car park has been built on that site."
1) In the 1st sentence, did I reduce the relative clause grammatically? Or do I have to say "the western road and parts of the eastern one have been destroyed to provide space for a road bridge which almost spans the width of the area and provides access to a city"?
2) If I am using the conjunction "after", can the verbs in the main and subordinate clauses be in the present perfect tense? In other words, is it grammatical to say "after the group of houses present in 1965 have been rebuilt east of the remaining part of the eastern road, a car park has been built on that site"?
This is my full essay (it was written by me):
The maps depict an area in Assford in 1965 and now.
Overall, the transport infrastructure of the area, as well as its housing, has improved considerably, but all the trees in the area have been removed.
In 1965, the area had a river running north-south, and there were two roads, one on the west side and the other on the east side, which terminated in the river. The eastern road led to a group of houses, in the northeast, whereas the western one connected the area to a city. Additionally, there were trees in the northwestern part, and a ferry could be seen on the river.
However, the western road and parts of the eastern one have been destroyed to provide space for a road bridge almost spanning the width of the area and providing access to a city. Apartment buildings have been built north of the river, many houses have been erected east of the river, and after the group of houses present in 1965 have been rebuilt east of the remaining part of the eastern road, a car park has been built on that site.
"However, the western road and parts of the eastern one have been destroyed to provide space for a road bridge almost spanning the width of the area and providing access to a city."
"Apartment buildings have been built north of the river, many houses have been erected east of the river, and after the group of houses present in 1965 have been rebuilt east of the remaining part of the eastern road, a car park has been built on that site."
1) In the 1st sentence, did I reduce the relative clause grammatically? Or do I have to say "the western road and parts of the eastern one have been destroyed to provide space for a road bridge which almost spans the width of the area and provides access to a city"?
2) If I am using the conjunction "after", can the verbs in the main and subordinate clauses be in the present perfect tense? In other words, is it grammatical to say "after the group of houses present in 1965 have been rebuilt east of the remaining part of the eastern road, a car park has been built on that site"?
This is my full essay (it was written by me):
The maps depict an area in Assford in 1965 and now.
Overall, the transport infrastructure of the area, as well as its housing, has improved considerably, but all the trees in the area have been removed.
In 1965, the area had a river running north-south, and there were two roads, one on the west side and the other on the east side, which terminated in the river. The eastern road led to a group of houses, in the northeast, whereas the western one connected the area to a city. Additionally, there were trees in the northwestern part, and a ferry could be seen on the river.
However, the western road and parts of the eastern one have been destroyed to provide space for a road bridge almost spanning the width of the area and providing access to a city. Apartment buildings have been built north of the river, many houses have been erected east of the river, and after the group of houses present in 1965 have been rebuilt east of the remaining part of the eastern road, a car park has been built on that site.