How to list the names of the people I'm referring to in a sentence

[D.Dawoud]

I'm trying to write an acknowlegement, but it seems that it is the wrong way to list the relation and names of the people that I'm reffering to, here is what I'm trying to say

This researchwork is in dept to the parents; Y and Z, and husband; L, of the author x because they funded her Ph.D. studies, and, thus the author x would like to thank Y, Z, and L for their support she could develop this idea and complete this work.

Is the way I'm doing it correct?

 

[tedmc]

Who wrote the acknowledgement?
Isn't the acknowledgement supposed to be written by the author?

 

[Tarheel]

Is the way I'm doing it correct?

No. You need to write shorter, simpler sentences, use correct punctuation, and check your spelling. (A person can be in debt to somebody, but her research work cannot.)