I agree with youIt's free advice. (It's worth whatever you paid for it.)
Rather than fix a long sentence by rearranging the words it is often better to make it into two or more shorter sentences. Sometimes people seem to think they need to put everything into one sentence. In fact, however, changing one long sentence into two or more shorter sentences can enhance clarity. (My opinion )
Welcome to the forum, @MichaelElkins. Your profile shows that you are an English teacher. As such, learners on the forum will assume everything you write is correct. Remember to end every sentence with an appropriate punctuation mark.I agree with you.
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