alpacinou
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- Sep 30, 2019
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- Iran
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Hello to all.
I want to describe this situation in a simple and elegant way:
A man is on a plane. His mind is so busy. The flight attendant is giving instructions about safety and what not. The man looks at her but his mind is so busy that he can't hear her.
So, I have written this:
Harry was in a reverie as the flight attendant started giving safety instructions. He could make out a slender woman moving her hands left and right in the air, performing the routine action she had done a thousand times. But Harry could not hear her as his mind was so preoccupied. For a second, in his daze, he felt like he was in a classroom and the woman was a teacher.
I honestly am not happy with this. I want to make it better. How can I?
I want to describe this situation in a simple and elegant way:
A man is on a plane. His mind is so busy. The flight attendant is giving instructions about safety and what not. The man looks at her but his mind is so busy that he can't hear her.
So, I have written this:
Harry was in a reverie as the flight attendant started giving safety instructions. He could make out a slender woman moving her hands left and right in the air, performing the routine action she had done a thousand times. But Harry could not hear her as his mind was so preoccupied. For a second, in his daze, he felt like he was in a classroom and the woman was a teacher.
I honestly am not happy with this. I want to make it better. How can I?