[General] happy-go-lucky

[contiluo]

Please help me make the paragraphs below sound natural. Thanks a lot.

In my elementary school life, I didn’t need to take the mock exams. It doesn’t make sense to me that why I have to spend so much time studying hard for numerous exams since I entered junior high school, even during summer and winter vacation. As a result, I don’t have time to have fun with friends and my family.

Therefore, I love the days when I was an elementary school student because it was the happy-go-lucky time in my life. Being an elementary school student, I didn’t feel any tremendous schoolwork pressure at all, so I could engage in activities that I found personally meaningful during that time. If it’s possible, I would rather go back to my elementary school life. Thus, I can regain the joy of being an elementary school student.

 

[emsr2d2]

Are you asking us to do your work for you again?

 

[contiluo]

No, I've revised the two paragraphs which are originally written by a junior student. However, I'm not sure if my revision sounds natural or there are some errors because I'm an ESL teacher. Therefore, I need native English speaker teachers to give me a correction.

 

[emsr2d2]

That's exactly what I meant by asking us to do your work for you. You are the teacher. You are being paid to teach these students and to correct their work. I assume that when you were hired as an ESL teacher, you didn't tell your employer that actually you would be getting strangers on a forum to make those corrections - on an unpaid basis!

 

[contiluo]

Honestly speaking, I tell the truth to my boss, supervisor, and colleagues that I get on the forum to ask for those corrections. In fact, one of my colleagues also often asks for corrections in this forum. As English is a foreign language for me, it is still beyond my reach to write a natural, idiomatic English sentences or paragraphs. Therefore, I often ask for corrections in this forum partly because it helps me sharpen my writing skills, but majorly benefits my students.