Fredoon
Member
- Joined
- Jan 13, 2022
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Denmark
- Current Location
- Switzerland
Hello,
I wrote the following text, could you correct my mistakes?
Once the school dismissal bell rang, my 10-year-old cousin with one of his classmates went to the so-called "Game net", where you have to pay for playing video games. They spent about half of the day in the Gamenet. Wasting a great deal of money aside, he no longer had enough time and energy to study. Consequently, he failed in the first semester. Later, his parents limited his hours of play to 45 minutes a day.
I wrote the following text, could you correct my mistakes?
Once the school dismissal bell rang, my 10-year-old cousin with one of his classmates went to the so-called "Game net", where you have to pay for playing video games. They spent about half of the day in the Gamenet. Wasting a great deal of money aside, he no longer had enough time and energy to study. Consequently, he failed in the first semester. Later, his parents limited his hours of play to 45 minutes a day.