Essay help and advice please!

[Toressays]

Would like some advice on grammar and how to express my essay better.

I'ts pretty generic but would like any form of help.

Discovery is the act or process of being discovered. It is a universal aspect of life which is a fundamental and critical component of one’s being. It is powerfully influenced by an individual’s interactions with others and the world around them, which can come from social and personal circumstances Discovery is the act or process of being discovered.

how about he intro?

 

[emsr2d2]

Welcome to the forum. :hi:

When will you submit this essay to your teacher/tutor?

 

[Toressays]

Thanks for the welcoming

Idk, I'm trying to redraft it as much as possible alone or with a little assistance first.

 

[Raymott]

I would like some advice on grammar and how to express my essay better.

[STRIKE]I'ts[/STRIKE] It's pretty generic but I would like any form of help.

We can't correct your homework here, so I've corrected the rest.
Have you read over it? There seems to be some repetition in the first paragraph. That's probably more than I'm allowed to tell you.

 

[+Technist Warp-]

You also seem to ask for advice but I'm not going to correct your essay.

Good essays have good structure: Introduction-Body-Conclusion.

Good essays have good grammar: Never use apostrophes unless it is possessive (e.g. Lucy's doll… The cat's hat...). Don't use 'don't' use 'do not'.

Good points have good structure: Point-Evidence-Example [or] Point-Example-Evidence.

Good essays have points that support each other: Link the points together.

I'm not saying that your essay has nothing wrong or is wrong. I'm just giving advice to you.

 

[emsr2d2]

Toressays, write the best essay you can without assistance. Submit it to your teacher/tutor for grading. When you get it back, you can come back to us for help if there are any comments or corrections you don't understand.

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