mintmint16
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Hi everybody, I'm a new learner of IELTS, this is my first essay. I need comments and corrections of you guys for my essay, please let me know if there's anything I need to avoid in an essay
Thank you so much!
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TASK QUESTION: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Music is a gift from God. We listen to music when we are sad, tired or even when we are happy. Just listen to music and see how it works afterwards. It is like magic as it brings us many benefits. Healing, refreshing or brain training for instance.
People nowadays have more choice of what music they will listen to since the mass media has developed rapidly. While adults tend to have more interest in traditional or classical music, modern teenagers now prefer International music such as rap, pop or electronic music. It doesn't matter what music they listen to, however, I strongly believe that traditional music is much more important and we should pay more attention to it. Traditional or folk music reflects the past, the culture, the roots of a nation. It show the way how previous generation thought, how they fought again aggression wars and how they brought freedom to their country. People, especially youngsters, should listen to folk music to know who they really are and what they have to do for their nation in the future.
On the other hand, this doesn't mean that international music is not important at all. Listening to songs come from another countries can help people to improve their vocabulary and language skills if they are studying a foreign language, English, the most popular language for example. It also help us to keep connected to friends from all over the world, as music is beyond language barriers.
To sum up, it is obvious that music plays an essential part in our daily life. People can listen to music and choose what types of music to their preference, however, traditional music must be preserved and brought into play to build one's country.
Thank you so much!
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TASK QUESTION: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Music is a gift from God. We listen to music when we are sad, tired or even when we are happy. Just listen to music and see how it works afterwards. It is like magic as it brings us many benefits. Healing, refreshing or brain training for instance.
People nowadays have more choice of what music they will listen to since the mass media has developed rapidly. While adults tend to have more interest in traditional or classical music, modern teenagers now prefer International music such as rap, pop or electronic music. It doesn't matter what music they listen to, however, I strongly believe that traditional music is much more important and we should pay more attention to it. Traditional or folk music reflects the past, the culture, the roots of a nation. It show the way how previous generation thought, how they fought again aggression wars and how they brought freedom to their country. People, especially youngsters, should listen to folk music to know who they really are and what they have to do for their nation in the future.
On the other hand, this doesn't mean that international music is not important at all. Listening to songs come from another countries can help people to improve their vocabulary and language skills if they are studying a foreign language, English, the most popular language for example. It also help us to keep connected to friends from all over the world, as music is beyond language barriers.
To sum up, it is obvious that music plays an essential part in our daily life. People can listen to music and choose what types of music to their preference, however, traditional music must be preserved and brought into play to build one's country.