I think "heed" is okay. It is associated with action whereas "hear" is not.Hm. Maybe hear would work better than heed.
That changes the number of syllables. I'd need a different adjective probably.I think "heed" is okay. It is associated with action whereas "hear" is not.
I don't like "destruction's gargantuan scale", using an object with the possessive". I prefer "destruction on a gargantuan scale".
This scream is also a warning, for us.But you heed a warning. You hear a wail (or scream).
Yes, I thought it was pretty good actually. Though the possessive use of "scale" is unusual, I suppose it works in a poem.Does my couplet make sense to you?
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