Due to my passion

[Economist2010]

Hi All,

I am interested in joining a company. I sent to the chairman and the Chief Marketing Officer and the Chief Operating Officer. I did that because my passion of joining the company and I never expected that all of them will respond to my mails.

I am sending the CEO who previously was the CMO to tell him that I did so due my passion. Can I say the following:

"As you aware, I sent you, Ahmed and mohamed due to my passion and you excited me as all of you have replied and offer support"

 

[emsr2d2]

Your sentence doesn't work at all. Try this:

As you are aware, I [STRIKE]sent[/STRIKE] contacted you, Ahmed and Mohamed [STRIKE]due to my passion[/STRIKE] because I was so eager to work at [company]. [STRIKE]and you excited me as[/STRIKE] I am delighted that all of you have replied and offered your support.

I really don't recommend using "passion" or "you excited me" in any professional context.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

. . . I really don't recommend using "passion" or "you excited me" in any professional context.

No, never use "passion" or "excited" in a business letter! Likewise, don't use "reach out."

 

[tedmc]

I would not call people by their first names in an official letter.

 

[Tarheel]

Please note that we don't send to somebody. We send something to somebody.

 

[emsr2d2]

Please note that we don't send to somebody. We send something to somebody.

I've corrected that in all of the OP's posts on this topic. He/She doesn't seem to have noticed. :roll: