Diary - Last night, my mum asked when

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Last night, my mum asked when the Olympic Games would end, and she wanted it end as soon as possible. I asked her why she wanted it end, and she said it was because all people had gone to watch the games and that no people invested in stock markets. Her stocks remained unchanged so she was frustrated.

 

[emsr2d2]

Last night, my mum asked when the Olympic Games would end will/are due to finish, and it was clear that she wanted it them to end as soon as possible.
I asked her why she wanted it end, and she said it was because all people had gone to watch the games and that no people invested everyone was watching the Olympics instead of investing in the stock markets market. The value of her stocks remained unchanged so she was frustrated.

See above. You're still forgetting to treat the Olympic Games as plural.
I've made a lot of changes to your second sentence. Saying that "all people (should be everyone) had gone to watch the games" suggests that they'd all gone to Paris!

 

[Tarheel]

She needs a hobby.

@Maybo While the Olympics are definitely a big event, it is unlikely that they have had much (if any) effect on the stock market in Hong Kong.

By the way, Simone Biles won another gold medal.

 

[Maybo]

@Maybo While the Olympics are definitely a big event, it is unlikely that they have had much (if any) effect on the stock market in Hong Kong

I guess she just made up an excuse for her unchanged stock value.

By the way, Simone Biles won another gold medal.

I saw her performance last night. She’s very strong!