Diary entry - Today, I bought a double cheeseburger

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Today, I bought a double cheeseburger, a cup of iced milk green tea and a packet of French fries for lunch. I was so full that I didn't even need to have dinner. In the afternoon, I was planning about what to do on the coming Happy Father's Day. Actually, my father doesn't care about festivals. He doesn't even celebrate his birthday. So, practically, the day is just for me and my mother. I want to eat a cake, and my mother wants to take photos of the cake and upload them to Facebook for gaining likes.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Today, I bought a double cheeseburger, a cup of iced [STRIKE]milk[/STRIKE] green tea with milk and a packet of French fries for lunch. I was so full that I didn't even need to have dinner. In the afternoon, I was planning [STRIKE]about[/STRIKE] what to do on the coming [STRIKE]Happy[/STRIKE] Father's Day. Actually, my father doesn't care about festivals. He doesn't even celebrate his birthday. So, practically, the day is just for me and my mother. I want to eat a cake, and my mother wants to take photos of the cake and upload them to Facebook to get likes.

Those compound sentences are improving!

 

[emsr2d2]

Maybo, I have improved your thread title. It's fine to let us know that it's a diary entry but you should also include some of the text (not just one word). Also, you originally wrote "diary-cake", using a hyphen. Before I read the post, I wondered what on earth a "diary-cake" is. Instead of a hyphen, you should have used a dash with a space on either side: "Diary - cake".