describing a person with their shadow

[alpacinou]

I want to describe a person's shadow.

Is this good?

In the corridor, he saw a petite shadow with long hair straggling down her shoulder. He tried to imagine the real person. An elfin face, honey blonde hair perhaps. Slim figure and small feet.

 

[Tarheel]

Well, shadows can have length and breadth but not size. How did he know it was a smallish woman and not a child?

 

[emsr2d2]

Also, shadows don't have gender, so you can't say that a shadow has long hair flowing down her shoulder. In any case, the shadow could be that of a small man with long hair!

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

And I doubt he'd get elfin face or blonde hair from a shadow. That seems like too much wishful thinking.

 

[alpacinou]

What if he knew the person?

In the corridor, he saw a petite shadow with long hair straggling down her shoulder. He knew it was Nicole. The shadow of her elfin face, slim figure and small feet was unmistakable.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Yes, then it's good.

 

[alpacinou]

Yes, then it's good.

Is all of it okay?

In the corridor, he saw a petite shadow with long hair straggling down her shoulder. He knew it was Nicole. The shadow of her elfin face, slim figure and small feet unmistakable.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Is all of it okay?

In the corridor, he saw a petite shadow with long hair straggling down her shoulder. He knew it was Nicole. The shadow of her elfin face, slim figure and small feet unmistakable.

As always, I would have said so it it wasn't.