[General] Course consultants are usually...(28 words)

[Silverobama]

Hi.

Today in our English club I was chatting with a friend who just had an interview in a language school. She wants to work as a course consultant there. A course consultant means a person who persuade some potential/prospective clients to buy the course to learn English at that school so therefore a course consultant should be persuasive and good at persuading people.

I wrote a sentence to sum up the above paragraph:

A Course Consultant usually needs to be very persuasive and good at persuading others because they need to persuade their potential and perspective clients to buy the courses.

Please help me to improve my italic sentence to make it natural and grammar. I used repeated words like "persuade" and also not sure about the grammar.

 

[emsr2d2]

Today in our English club I was chatting with a friend who had just had an interview [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] at/for a language school. She wants to work as a course consultant there. A course consultant [STRIKE]means[/STRIKE] is a person who persuades [STRIKE]some[/STRIKE] potential/prospective clients to buy [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] an English course [STRIKE]to learn English[/STRIKE] at that school. [STRIKE]so[/STRIKE] Therefore, a course consultant should be persuasive. [STRIKE]and good at persuading people. [/STRIKE]

I wrote a sentence to sum up the above paragraph:

A Course Consultant usually needs to be very persuasive [STRIKE]and good at persuading others[/STRIKE] because they need to [STRIKE]persuade[/STRIKE] convince/encourage [STRIKE]their[/STRIKE] potential and prospective clients to buy the courses.

Please help me to improve my italic sentence to make it natural and [STRIKE]grammar[/STRIKE] grammatical. I [STRIKE]used[/STRIKE] have repeated words like "persuade" and I'm also not sure about the grammar.

See above for my corrections and suggestions.

Saying "persuasive and good at persuading people/others" is tautologous.

 

[Tarheel]

I would call that person a recruiter.

 

[tedmc]

How about:

The Course Consultant needs to be persuasive as his/her job is to persuade prospective students to enrol into the courses.

I'd use a definite article since you have capitalized the name of the position.
Persuasive and good at persuading others mean the same thing.
I think you mean prospective rather than perspective. Prospective also mean potential.

 

[Tarheel]

We don't normally capitalize the names of occupations. Also, I wouldn't use "course consultant" as that person does not do any consulting. Instead I would say that person recruits people for the course.

 

[teechar]

Perhaps a marketing consultant.

 

[emsr2d2]

It's hard to say what the job title should be without knowing exactly what they do and how they do it.

 

[Silverobama]

It's hard to say what the job title should be without knowing exactly what they do and how they do it.

Exactly. I also think "course consultant" is weird but they're called a course consultant here and for many years.

What they are doing is to chat with anyone who goes into the language school. Let's say there's one in a mall and one is interested in learning English, then this person walk into the language school and someone would come up to chat with him/her in English. I think they'll also ask the students there to continue to learn before their current courses are soon going to be finished. I think there are many terms for it, I'll keep all your suggestions.

Edited: Also, they'll let the students know what courses they need to take after the enrollment.

Much appreciated!

 

[tedmc]

I have seen the term increasing being used, probably to make a position sound more impressive and important. A consultant is usually one who is highly qualified, knowledgeable and has special skills in a particular field. In this case, the position does not call for any specialist knowledge but basically to sell a product. It is like the job of a salesperson, or, to make it sound nicer, a marketing executive.

 

[Tarheel]

Exactly. I also think "course consultant" is weird, but they've been called that here for many years.

What they do is chat with anyone who goes into the language school. Let's say there's one in a mall and one is interested in learning English, then this person walk into the language school and someone would come up to chat with him/her in English. I think they'll also ask the students there to continue to learn before their current courses are soon going to be finished. I think there are many terms for it, I'll keep all your suggestions.

Edited: Also, they'll let the students know what courses they need to take after [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] enrollment.

Much appreciated!

I am both better informed and more confused.

Maybe "course consultant" is appropriate after all. (The students consult with them about what courses to take.)

 

[tedmc]

I am both better informed and more confused.

Maybe "course consultant" is appropriate after all. (The students consult with them about what courses to take.)

That is broadening the meaning of the word "consult" to the max.