could please help me i have ielts

[MozaEduc]

Hi everybody,

could someone please correct for me this essay (task 1 which is about graph ielts exam).
I need comments in everythings.

 

[5jj]

Hi everybody,

could someone please correct for me this essay (task 1 which is about graph ielts exam).
I need comments in everythings.

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