Correction of some sentences.

[Mr. Smith G.]

Can anyone check these different sentences?

1. But with support we can overcome everything.
2. I expect to spend my time abroad very differently, I hope to meet new people and get acquainted with the country’s traditions.
3. I’m going to meet new friends at the new places I am going to visit.
4. It is a great experience, and a chance to find out new things about a new country’s culture.
5. The success will be the improvement of my language, the thing I need in the future for achieving my goals and getting new experience.
5. I want to graduate from the university, and find a good job.
Main activities and responsibilities: Meeting guests and getting them familiar with the hotel.
6. I grieve and try to explain what bothers me.

 

[TheParser]

2. I expect to spend my time abroad very differently, I hope to meet new people and get acquainted with the country’s traditions.

4. It is a great experience, and a chance to find out new things about a new country’s culture.

5. I want to graduate from the university, and find a good job.

***** NOT A TEACHER *****

Hello, Mr. G.:

Someone will soon check your sentences.

I just wanted to comment on your use of commas.

In my (very) humble opinion:

In sentence 2, there should be no comma after "differently." Teachers, I believe, call that a comma splice/fault. You have written two sentences. So you need to end the first sentence with a period, or you can join the two sentences by adding the word "and" after the comma.

In sentence 4, there is no need for a comma. "It is an experience and a chance."

In sentence 5, there is no need for a comma. You want to do two things: to graduate and (to) find a good job.

 

[teechar]

This has been posted to the wrong forum! ;-)

 

[Mr. Smith G.]

Should I post it to the correct forum on my own?

 

[teechar]

1. [STRIKE]But[/STRIKE] However, with support, we can overcome everything.
2. I expect to spend my time abroad very differently. I hope to meet new people and get acquainted with the country’s traditions.
3. I'm going to meet new friends at the new places I am going to visit.
4. It is a great experience and a chance to find out new things about a new country’s culture.
5. [STRIKE]The success will be the improvement of[/STRIKE] My main goal is to improve my English language skills-- the thing I need in the future for achieving success. [STRIKE]my goals and getting new experience.[/STRIKE]
5. I want to graduate from [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] university and find a good job.
Main activities and responsibilities: Meeting guests and [STRIKE]getting them familiar with[/STRIKE] showing them around the hotel and its facilities.
6. I grieve and try to explain what bothers me.

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[TheParser]

***** NOT A TEACHER *****


Hello, Mr. G.:


As you know, there are often many correct ways to write a sentence.

You wrote: "I grieve and try to explain what bothers me."

As the teacher told us, that sentence is fine.

But I personally would rephrase it.

In your sentence, I get a "rush" feeling. That is, you seem to hurrying to do two things at the same time.

I would be more comfortable with slowing things down. Thus,

"I grieve, and I try to explain what bothers me."