Company Introduction

[Gaya87]

Hi, is there anything wrong in these sentences?


(Company Name) one of the leading manpower recruiting company in Malaysia since 1984. We cover many different fields from Manufacturing, Construction, Agriculture, Plantation, Services and many others. Our Foreign associates in South East Counties are doing wonderful job in collaboration with our organization in identifying and selecting the best talented people for various kind of assignments in Malaysia. All guidelines are according to the requirement form Ministry of Home Affair and Ministry of Human Resources. We looking forward to provide our services to your organization in recruiting required number of foreign workers.

 

[probus]

Lots wrong. Company has been one of the ... since 1984.

...are doing a wonderful job for various kinds of ...

We adhere to all government guidelines ... and we look forward to providing...

 

[teechar]

Gaya, try fixing your text, bearing in mind the points mentioned by Probus, and post the revised version below.

 

[Gaya87]

Gaya, try fixing your text, bearing in mind the points mentioned by Probus, and post the revised version below.

My revised version as below:

ABC has been of the leading manpower recruiting company in Malaysia since 1984. We cover many different fields from Manufacturing, Construction, Agriculture, Plantation, Services and many others. Our Foreign associates in South East Counties are doing a wonderful job in collaboration with our organization in identifying and selecting the best talented people for various kinds of assignments in Malaysia. We adhere to all government guidelines according to the requirement form Ministry of Home Affair and Ministry of Human Resources and we look forward to providing our services to your organization in recruiting required number of foreign workers.

 

[emsr2d2]

ABC has been of the ...

That's wrong. You appear to have omitted a word.

 

[tedmc]

My revised version as below:

ABC has been-- of the leading manpower recruiting company in Malaysia since 1984. We cover many different fields, from Manufacturing, Construction, Agriculture, Plantation, Services and many others. Our Foreign associates in Southeast Asian Countries are doing a wonderful job in collaboration with our organization in identifying and selecting the best talented people for various kinds of assignments in Malaysia. We adhere to all government guidelines according to the requirements from the Ministry of Home Affairs and Ministry of Human Resources, and we look forward to providing our services to your organization in recruiting [STRIKE]required number of[/STRIKE] foreign workers.

Those parts marked red need corrections. Many words should not have been capitalized.

 

[teechar]

This is my revised version: [STRIKE]as below:[/STRIKE]

ABC has been [STRIKE]of the[/STRIKE] a leading [STRIKE]manpower[/STRIKE] staff recruiting company in Malaysia since 1984. We cover many different fields [STRIKE]from[/STRIKE] including manufacturing, construction, agriculture, plantation, services and many others. We collaborate with our foreign associates in South East [STRIKE]Counties[/STRIKE] Asia [STRIKE]are doing a wonderful job in collaboration with our organization in[/STRIKE] to identify [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] and select [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] the [STRIKE]best[/STRIKE] most-talented people for various kinds of assignments in Malaysia. We [STRIKE]adhere to[/STRIKE] comply with all government guidelines, [STRIKE]according to the requirement form[/STRIKE] especially those from the Ministry of Home Affairs and the Ministry of Human Resources, and we look forward to providing our services to your organization in recruiting [STRIKE]required number of[/STRIKE] foreign workers.

Try that.