tzfujimino
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- Joined
- Dec 8, 2007
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- English Teacher
- Native Language
- Japanese
- Home Country
- Japan
- Current Location
- Japan
Hello.:-D
One of my students wrote in her writing assignment:
1. This pen is the most important thing for me.
2. I got the pen when I was four-teen years old.
3. It was my birthday present at my four-teen years old birthday.
4. My mother gave me the pen.
5. I was very happy then.
6. So, I have cherished since then.
My correction:
1. This pen is the most important thing for me.
2. I got the pen when I was fourteen years old.
3. It was my birthday present on my fourteenth birthday.
4. My mother gave me the pen.
(Well, actually, I think #3 and #4 would be better if they were put together: It was a present from my mother on my 14th birthday.)
5. I was very happy then.
6. So, I have cherished it/the pen since then.
Is the word 'cherish' in #6 used correctly? Could 'treasure' be a better choice?
Thank you very much.
One of my students wrote in her writing assignment:
1. This pen is the most important thing for me.
2. I got the pen when I was four-teen years old.
3. It was my birthday present at my four-teen years old birthday.
4. My mother gave me the pen.
5. I was very happy then.
6. So, I have cherished since then.
My correction:
1. This pen is the most important thing for me.
2. I got the pen when I was fourteen years old.
3. It was my birthday present on my fourteenth birthday.
4. My mother gave me the pen.
(Well, actually, I think #3 and #4 would be better if they were put together: It was a present from my mother on my 14th birthday.)
5. I was very happy then.
6. So, I have cherished it/the pen since then.
Is the word 'cherish' in #6 used correctly? Could 'treasure' be a better choice?
Thank you very much.
