[General] Checking few sentences.

[vogelvogelvogel3]

1) From the mouth of our employers often present suggestion about the introduction(entry) of possibilites of having at the same time bonuses from softwares: "Aero" and "Vervo"

2) Effect of bleeding in the movie "Harry Potter 2" develop improperly.

3) After conducted tests we noticed that in 63 minutes, effect of blooding is stopted and it doesn't change for any longer.

4) Currently there are no possibility to use at the same time bonuses from both softwares.

5) Possibilty of having two bonuses at the same time wouldn't compel employers using Sawe and ELdo, to stay in other departaments.

6) This suggestion is not intended to increase the possibility of our company, merely enable better organization, which would enable us to be in the same room regardless of their computers.


These sentences are about diffrent things, so please don''t links the threades in these sentences.

I'm looking forward to your help.

 

[emsr2d2]

Posting multiple unrelated sentences in one post is completely pointless. It will make the replies meaningless because some people will try to help with just a couple of them, others might try to help with all of them. And some of us just won't help at all.

I suggest you remove sentences 2, 3, 4, 5 and 6, and the unnecessary explanation, leaving just sentence 1 in this thread. After you get a few responses about sentence 1, start a new thread for sentence 2.

 

[Tarheel]

Sentence one. Perhaps:

Our employers tell us....

I can't figure out the rest of it.

 

[Tarheel]

After 63 minutes the person stops bleeding because that person is dead. Problem solved.

 

[vogelvogelvogel3]

OK so now,
Sentence one:

1) From the mouth of our employers often present suggestion about the introduction(entry) of possibilites of having at the same time bonuses from softwares: "Aero" and "Vervo"

Yes i want to tell that our employers suggest us, but in more proffesionall english, something like here ,
Our employers used the following words: they often suggest making possibilites of having at the same time bonuses from software Aero and Vervo.

(Aero and Vervo - it is names from our company, so don't think is it possibly to have a bonuses from this software etc. )

 

[Tarheel]

Choose one.

Our employers tell us....

OR

Our employers say that....

OR

Our employers say....

 

[Tarheel]

Are you sure you don't mean "clients"?

 

[Tarheel]

Or:

Our employers suggest....

 

[Tarheel]

Don't say:

Our employers suggest us....

Maybe you mean to say:

Our employers suggest [something] to us.

 

[Tarheel]

The word "software" is a noncount noun.

 

[Tarheel]

You could say:

Our employers often suggest that we....

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

I don't think it is possible....

 

[Raymott]

The word "software" is a noncount noun.

Have you considered numbering the sentences that you are correcting, Tarheel?
I was going to have a go, but as ems points out, it becomes completely out of hand. They're yours. ;-)
I'm not sure I understand the need for 8 consecutive posts for one question, but maybe that's just me.

 

[Tarheel]

Have you considered numbering the sentences that you are correcting, Tarheel?
I was going to have a go, but as ems points out, it becomes completely out of hand. They're yours. ;-)
I'm not sure I understand the need for 8 consecutive posts for one question, but maybe that's just me.

Yes, I noticed that two of them are almost identical, but maybe the repetition helps.

I can't figure out how that sentence should end, but I have about a million beginnings.

 

[Rover_KE]

I think we've read enough of the million alternative beginnings.

 

[vogelvogelvogel3]

Our employers often suggest that we ...

Yes it is good, but i don't want to tell, to who I suggest it, just suggest, but without entity.

So..
Our employers often suggest/ present to us suggestion about making a possibilites of the same time bonuses from software .. XYZ and YZX

(and just don't think that softwares are something to computer and it can't give you a bonus, just imagine that you use them and you can teleport and fly)

 

[emsr2d2]

Our employers often suggest/ present to us suggestion about making a possibilites of the same time bonuses from software .. XYZ and YZX

(and just don't think that softwares are something to computer and it can't give you a bonus, just imagine that you use them and you can teleport and fly)

I'm afraid I can't understand either of the sentences above. What do you mean by "making a possibilities" (note that "a" is singular and "possibilities" is plural)?
What do you mean by "Don't think softwares can't give you a bonus"?

 

[vogelvogelvogel3]

I'm afraid I can't understand either of the sentences above. What do you mean by "making a possibilities" (note that "a" is singular and "possibilities" is plural)?
What do you mean by "Don't think softwares can't give you a bonus"?

making a possibilities - making that something can be possible, so here , employers will can to have both bonuses at the same time

 

[emsr2d2]

"Making a possibilities" means "making [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] something [STRIKE]can be[/STRIKE] possible" so here the employers will [STRIKE]can[/STRIKE] be able to have both bonuses at the same time.

See my corrections above. I think you probably mean that the employees can have both bonuses.

Do you understand that the singular indefinite article "a" cannot be used before a plural noun ("possibilities")?

How about "Our employers say that it's possible to get a bonus from both the "Aero" and the "Vervo" software".

 

[vogelvogelvogel3]

How about "Our employers say that it's possible to get a bonus from both the "Aero" and the "Vervo" software".

Yes it would be good, but, I can't say "it's possible" because now It is impossible, but our employers want to make it possible. (I think now you know what I mean)

And of course our employers can't make it possible by themselfs, so we report this suggestion to someone who can.