Can you check my letter please?

[roeyzaw1]

Can you please check the following letter (grammer, vocabulary etc.):

Hello PHET,


I am writing to request further information about Clifton college. My son (14 years old) is interested in learning there next year. But before I send him there, I would like clarification of the following details:


Firstly, are there pupils in the school who come from Israel? Because one of my biggest concerns is - how will my child survive alone in a foreign country? Do you know any pupils who came to the school from Israel without any family in the UK?


Secondly, I am concerned about the language. Although our family lived in the UK for several years while he was young, he doesn't have excellent English.Do you think he can handle it? Based on previous cases?


Yours sincerely,

Ronit -------

 

[tedmc]

Hello PHET,


I am writing to request for further information about Clifton college. My son (14 years old) is interested [STRIKE]in learning[/STRIKE] to study there next year. But before I send him there, I would like clarification of the following details:


Firstly, are there pupils in the school who come from Israel? Because one of my biggest concerns is - how will my child survive alone in a foreign country? Do you know any pupils who [STRIKE]came[/STRIKE] has come to the school from Israel without any family in the UK?


Secondly, I am concerned about him learning the language. Although our family lived in the UK for several years while he was young, he [STRIKE]doesn't have excellent[/STRIKE] is not very good in English.Do you think he can handle it based on [STRIKE]previous cases[/STRIKE] your experience?


Yours sincerely,

Ronit -------

not a teacher

 

[roeyzaw1]

Thank you!!

 

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