Xiaoyong Huang
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- May 26, 2018
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- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Chinese
- Home Country
- China
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- China
I practise writing at this website: [URL removed]
Could you please tell me what's wrong with the greeting 'Dear sir or Madam' and the explanation?
By the way, my writing gets a low score, so other improvements are needed.
The following is my writing:
Dear sir or Madam,
I am angry about that you fail to finish an urgent task on time again. Deadline means you have to complete your work by it. The other staff will follow your behaviour, so you had better finish it as soon as possible.
Manager
Here are the requirements:
You are a manager in a small advertising agency. You have been informed that a member of your team hasn't completed an urgent task on time. This is not the first time they have missed an important deadline. Write them an email about the problem. Explain why deadlines are important. Describe the effect on other staff of not meeting deadlines. Suggest what they should do about the situation.
(If you find anything wrong or inappropriate in my language, please tell me.)
Could you please tell me what's wrong with the greeting 'Dear sir or Madam' and the explanation?
By the way, my writing gets a low score, so other improvements are needed.
The following is my writing:
Dear sir or Madam,
I am angry about that you fail to finish an urgent task on time again. Deadline means you have to complete your work by it. The other staff will follow your behaviour, so you had better finish it as soon as possible.
Manager
Here are the requirements:
You are a manager in a small advertising agency. You have been informed that a member of your team hasn't completed an urgent task on time. This is not the first time they have missed an important deadline. Write them an email about the problem. Explain why deadlines are important. Describe the effect on other staff of not meeting deadlines. Suggest what they should do about the situation.
(If you find anything wrong or inappropriate in my language, please tell me.)
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