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Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

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The investigation into Nick's death takes an unlikely turn when Jack, the son of businessman Alex, becomes a suspect after providing an unbelievable alibi. Alex orders his daughter, Juli to replace Jack as CEO of his company, Alex Group. Juli reviews the company’s documents and discovers gaps in the records from when Jack was CEO. While all this is going on, Tomas claims his next victim, Dr Maria. Who is she? Why she is being targeted by the serial killer?

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As the mystery around Nick's death deepens, the investigation leads them to suspect Jack, the son of businessman Alex. While all this is going on, Tomas claims his next victim, Dr Maria.
 
Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long summary
The investigation into Nick's death takes an unlikely turn when Jack, the son of Alex, a businessman, [STRIKE]Alex,[/STRIKE] becomes a suspect after providing an unbelievable alibi. Alex orders his daughter, Juli, to replace Jack as CEO of his company, Alex Group. Juli reviews the company’s documents and discovers gaps in the records from when Jack was CEO. While all this is going on, Tomas claims his next victim, Dr Maria. Who is she? Why [STRIKE]she[/STRIKE] is she being targeted by the serial killer?

Short summary
As the mystery around Nick's death deepens, the investigation leads them to suspect Jack, the son of Alex, a businessman. [STRIKE]Alex.[/STRIKE] While all this is going on, Tomas claims his next victim, Dr Maria.

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