An Iban Movie, Perangsang Rentap

[Gaya87]

Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long Summary
Having admired the brave Sarawakian warrior Rentap, Jenang has a dream of joining his fight against the British rule. However, much to his disappointment, Jenang is not allowed to participate. A chance encounter with Entiang, a girl from the opposite village, leads to him falling for her. Things only get tougher for Jenang, as now he has to face off with Jambai to win Entiang's heart.

Short summary
Rejected to join Rentap in his battle against the British, a brave young soldier, Jenang’s destiny changes when he falls for a girl from the opposite village.

 

[Gaya87]

I would love some feedback on the above writing, thank you.

 

[tedmc]

Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long Summary
Having admired the brave Sarawakian warrior Rentap, Jenang has a dream of joining his fight against the British rule. However, much to his disappointment, Jenang is not allowed to participate. A chance encounter with Entiang, a girl from the opposite village, leads [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] him to falling for her. Things only get tougher for Jenang, as now he has to face off with Jambai to win Entiang's heart.

Short summary
Rejected [STRIKE]to join[/STRIKE] by Rentap to join [STRIKE]in [/STRIKE]his battle against the British, a brave young soldier, Jenang,[STRIKE]’s[/STRIKE] had his destiny changed when he falls for a girl from the opposite village.

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