hatimhussain
Banned
- Joined
- Dec 11, 2006
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Urdu
- Home Country
- Pakistan
- Current Location
- Pakistan
I have fabricated the following story to find out my mistakes in;
Please guide me.
PART-1
TO BE CONTINUED.
- The usage of tenses.
- The usage of vocabulary
- Orderliness
Please guide me.
PART-1
- Yet again Robert rebuked Tony this morning. Tony had over sighted just a single typographical error while proofreading a draft of as many as 15 pages. “Tony you have been working for this Organization for thirteen years now and still can’t you proofread immaculately”, Robert, his boss, yelled.
- A couple of days ago Robert had shouted at Tony just because a better part of Tony’s shirt had come out of his trousers from the backside. “How can you be so unkempt? Don’t you know the office decorum? Put your shirt inside your trousers, will you”, Robert roared in front of the whole staff. Tony, a Private Secretary in Robert’s Organization, just lowered his head in disgrace.
- It was quite unusual behavior for a man who was known to be a kindhearted, cheerful and accommodating, suddenly turned into a hostile, surly and rude person within one and half month or so. “He seems to have lost control of his mind”, the workers thought in disgust. Some of them in fact started to mock him behind his back.
- Tony was not the only victim of Robert’s rebuking; in fact, all the workers were tolerating his insulting behavior.
- They were afraid that if argued, they would definitely be laid off. Robert had already fired two workers since they had hit back at Robert’s unbecoming slating.
- Tony had been with Robert since the founding of Robert’s Organization. He had worked along with Robert ceaselessly to take it from nowhere to a whopping organization. Undoubtedly, in return Robert also rewarded him with handsome salary package and above all, always spoke highly of him.
- Tony was now quite concerned with Robert’s mental condition which was getting deteriorated by every passing day. After all, he had enjoyed long pleasant relationship with his boss and at times, he had found Robert more of a friend than a typical boss.
- The ever-congenial atmosphere inside the organization completely changed. The smiles and contentment on the faces of the workers vanished.
TO BE CONTINUED.
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