A letter to the editor

[Mayn]

Hi everyone , I will start studying English literature , and I began practicing my writing so I wrote a letter to the editor I will provide the link to the article here : please write me feedback on language and content and rate it out from 10.
https://mobile.nytimes.com/2017/03/.../opinion/editorialsandoped/letters/index.html

And my letter is :
To The Editor ,
"The Pope on Panhandling : Give Without Worry" ( Editorial March 3) . This article deals with the question: how should respond to the needy person who asks for help?

I would like to challenge the Pope Francis' perspective , offering money is not the appropriate thing to do , because we can not predict in which way this needy person will spend the money , he/she might buy alcohol or drugs which is dangerous , Therefore I believe that the right thing to do is to buy the necessary stuff like: food , clothes ,,and so on .

 

[tedmc]

[STRIKE]To The[/STRIKE] Dear Editor ,

I refer to the editorial "The Pope on Panhandling : Give Without Worry" ( Editorial March 3). [STRIKE]This[/STRIKE] The article deals with the question: how should we respond to [STRIKE]the [/STRIKE] a needy person who asks for help?

I would like to challenge [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Pope Francis' perspective. Offering money is not the appropriate thing to do, because we cannot predict [STRIKE]in which way[/STRIKE] how [STRIKE]this[/STRIKE] a needy person will spend the money. He/She might buy alcohol or drugs, which is dangerous. Therefore I believe that the right thing to do is to buy the [STRIKE]necessary stuff[/STRIKE] essentials like food, clothing and so on.

 

[teechar]

Hello Mayn, and welcome to the forum.
Note the changes I've made, especially to your punctuation.

I would give it a 6 or a 7.

Hi everyone, I will start studying English literature, and I began practicing my writing, so I wrote a letter to the editor-- [STRIKE]I will provide[/STRIKE] see the link below. [STRIKE]to the article here :[/STRIKE] Please [STRIKE]write[/STRIKE] give me feedback on language and content and rate it out [STRIKE]from[/STRIKE] of 10.

https://mobile.nytimes.com/2017/03/03/opinion/the-pope-on-panhandling-give-without-worry.html?_r=0&referer=https://mobile.nytimes.com/2017/03/10/opinion/helping-the-homeless.html?ref=topics&referer=http://topics.nytimes.com/top/opinion/editorialsandoped/letters/index.html

And my letter is:

To The Editor ,
"The Pope on Panhandling : Give Without Worry" (Editorial, March 3). This/your article deals with the question of how we should respond [STRIKE]to the[/STRIKE] when a needy person [STRIKE]who[/STRIKE] asks for help.

I would like to challenge [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Pope Francis's perspective as I believe that offering money is not the appropriate thing to do, because we can not predict in which way this needy person will spend the money. He/she might buy alcohol or drugs with it. [STRIKE]which is dangerous ,[/STRIKE] Therefore, I believe that the right thing to do is to buy them [STRIKE]the necessary[/STRIKE] essential stuff like food, clothes and so on.

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