A Korea Movie, The Swindlers

[Gaya87]

Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long synopsis
A con man who had been reported dead after committing a historical fraud case is rumored to be alive. Prosecutor Park who was in collusion with the con man needs to eliminate him to avoid a corruption scandal. During his pursuit of the con man, he meets Ji-sung who is also after the same man for a personal revenge. Realizing their mutual goals, they decide to team up, but with hidden motives.

Short synopsis
A prosecutor teams up with a swindler to hunt down an infamous con man who was known dead, amid their hidden motives and deception.

 

[TheParser]

Prosecutor Park who was in collusion with the con man needs to eliminate him to avoid a corruption scandal.

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Hello, Gaya

In my opinion, "who was in collusion with the con man" is definitely a non-defining adjective/relative clause.

So you need a comma after "Park" and a comma after "man."

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Maybe your short synopsis might read something like: "For different motives, a prosecutor and a swindler team up to hunt down an infamous con man they both thought was dead."

P.S. For even more clarity, you could insert "whom" (or "who" in conversational English) after "man."

 

[teechar]

Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long synopsis
A conman who had been reported dead after committing a historical fraud [STRIKE]case[/STRIKE] is rumored to be alive. Prosecutor Park, who was in collusion with the conman, needs to eliminate him to avoid a corruption scandal. During his pursuit of the conman, he meets Ji-sung who is also after the same man [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] to exact a personal revenge. Realizing their mutual goals, they decide to team up but each with their own hidden motives.

Short synopsis
A prosecutor teams up with a swindler, in an atmosphere of hidden motives and deception, to hunt down an infamous conman who was [STRIKE]known[/STRIKE] believed dead. [STRIKE], amid their hidden motives and deception.[/STRIKE]

Can you give us the link to the blog where all this stuff is going? I'm curious to have a look.