A Japanese movie, La La at Rock Bottom

[Gaya87]

Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long Summary
During a band`s performance at a square in Osaka, a young man suddenly rushes to the stage and starts singing. Shocked by the man’s action, the audience is soon enthralled by the man`s singing voice. Soon, the band's manager, Kasumi, takes him into her care and finds out that he has amnesia. All he has is a sudden burst of urge to sing. She makes him her band's lead vocalist while he gradually regains his memory and his mysterious past unfolds.

Short summary
A kind-hearted Kasumi takes the mysterious amnesiac Shigeo under her care. When she discovers his singing skills, she makes him her band's lead singer until his dark past clashes with his new life.

 

[teechar]

Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long Summary
During a band`s performance at a square in Osaka, a young mansuddenly rushes to the stage and starts singing. Shocked by the man’s action, the audience is soon enthralled by the man`s singing voice. [STRIKE]Soon,[/STRIKE] Afterwards, the band's manager, Kasumi, takes him into her care and finds out that he has amnesia. All he has is a sudden burst of urge to sing. She makes him her band's lead vocalist while he gradually regains his memory and his mysterious past unfolds.

Short summary
A kind-hearted Kasumi takes the mysterious amnesiac Shigeo under her care. When she discovers his singing skills, she makes him her band's lead singer until his dark past clashes with his new life.

I don't understand the part in blue.

 

[Gaya87]

I don't understand the part in blue.

takes him into her care

When Shiegeo, loses his memory after being beaten up by a group of strange men, he bumps into Kasumi, the young manager of popular band Akainu, during a live performance at a square in Osaka. Then, Kasumi, takes him into her care and persuades him to join them as a vocalist.

I have revised the short summary as below, please give your feedback.
Shigeo, a young man suffering from amnesia meets Kasumi, a young popular band manger, and she discovers his singing skills, and makes him her band's lead singer until his dark past clashes with his new life.

 

[teechar]

When Shiegeo, loses his memory after being beaten up by a group of strange men, he bumps into Kasumi, the young manager of popular band Akainu, during a live performance at a square in Osaka. [STRIKE]Then,[/STRIKE] Kasumi, takes him into her care and persuades him to join [STRIKE]them[/STRIKE] the band as a vocalist.

I have revised the short summary as below. Please give your feedback.

Shigeo, a young man suffering from amnesia, meets Kasumi, a young popular band manger [STRIKE]and she[/STRIKE] who discovers his singing skills and makes him her band's lead singer, until his dark past clashes with his new life.

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