a formal e-mail

[hebezh]

Hi, my name is Zohre i'm trying to write a formal email to a university office asking some questions. I'm fairly new to this site and I don't exactly know how it works but I was hoping to post my email here and get some feedback. So here is my email :

Dear Sir/Madam

My name is Zohre Momeni Nadiki. I would like to be admitted to -------------------------------PhD program.

I am an MA student at -------------------------. Currently I am working on my dissertation in the field of Intellectual Property Law.

I would be grateful if you could guide me how to find a supervisor.

Thank you.

Sincerely.

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Thanks a lot.

 

[teechar]

Dear Sir/Madam,

[STRIKE]My name is Zohre Momeni Nadiki[/STRIKE] I'm interested in applying for admission to the XYZ [STRIKE]. I would like to be admitted to -------------------------------[/STRIKE] PhD program.
[STRIKE]
I am an MA student at -------------------------.[/STRIKE] Currently, I am working on my masters dissertation in the field of intellectual property law.

I would be grateful if you could guide me [STRIKE]how to find[/STRIKE] with finding a supervisor at your university.

Thank you for your help.

Yours faithfully, [STRIKE]Sincerely.[/STRIKE]

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Zohre Momeni Nadiki

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