A Chines Movie , Fatal Countdown: Reset

[Gaya87]

Hi, can you please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long summary
Xia Tian is a single mother who works as an associate researcher, helping to complete a machine that can allow people to go back in time. However, upon the completion of the machine, her son Dou Dou is kidnapped by a mysterious man who wants to know the technology behind time-traveling machine. In order to save her son, she takes a risk and travels to a time an hour and fifty minutes earlier to prevent the kidnapping.

Short summary
When her son is kidnapped by a mysterious man, the inventor of a time machine, Xia Tian, goes back in time an hour and fifty minutes earlier to rescue him.

 

[emsr2d2]

In your short summary, it's impossible to tell whether the mysterious man or Xia Tian is the inventor of the time machine. Remove "earlier" - it's redundant after you've said "goes back in time".

 

[teechar]

Long summary
Xia Tian is a single mother who works as an associate researcher helping to [STRIKE]complete[/STRIKE] make/design/build a machine that [STRIKE]can[/STRIKE] allows people to go back in time. However, upon the completion of the project, [STRIKE]machine,[/STRIKE] her son Dou Dou is kidnapped by a mysterious man who wants to know the technology behind time-traveling machine. In order to save her son, she takes a risk and travels to a time an hour and fifty minutes earlier to prevent the kidnapping.

Short summary
When her son is kidnapped by a mysterious man, the inventor of a time machine Xia Tian goes back in time an hour and fifty minutes [STRIKE]earlier[/STRIKE] to rescue him.

Note the correct spelling for "Chinese" in your title.

 

[Gaya87]

In your short summary, it's impossible to tell whether the mysterious man or Xia Tian is the inventor of the time machine.

This is just to make the short summary more interesting, isn’t?

I feel it’s very briefer if I don’t mention about the inventor & mysterious man.

 

[teechar]

I feel it’s very briefer if I don’t mention about the inventor & mysterious man.

Can you fix the mistakes in that sentence?

 

[Gaya87]

Can you fix the mistakes in that sentence?

It’s a briefer version if I don’t mention it about the inventor and the mysterious man.

 

[teechar]

Delete "it about".

 

[Matthew Wai]

It would be briefer without mentioning the inventor and the mysterious man.