[Essay] “Learning does not finish when you leave school” Discuss the statement.

[EDarcy]

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"Learning does not finish when you leave school." Discuss the statement.

It is well known that people never stop learning through their whole life. That is why leaving school is just another step to receiving new information using different methods. Nowadays, people find more and more creative ways to educate themselves or to get educated.
Firstly, in the era of Internet the most easily accessible means for learning is receiving information online. For that reason, online courses for learning foreign languages and adopting new skills are very popular among the modern people. Such courses are organized for almost every fields of modern life – from how to use a modern technology device to how to overcome stress.
The second way in which people educate themselves after leaving school is the travelling and sightseeing. It is a very common method for receiving new information and for widening one’s knowledge about the world history, geography, culture and economy at the same time. What is more, this is an active process which facilitates the ability of people to remember what they have seen and it is a great way to enrich one’s breadth of knowledge even after the end of their school education.
Lastly, people widen their horizons by taking part in different entertainment clubs. Sport or dance clubs are the perfect places for people to know more about other people’s way of life; their points of view on different topics or to exchange ideas. In this way people learn more about the communication between human beings outside the limited space that schools offer.
To summarise, opportunities for learning and education about people after they left school are many. Online courses, travelling around the world and communicating with other people are great ways for us to learn more about the world and the secrets it keeps.

 

[tedmc]

"Learning does not finish when you leave school." Discuss the statement.

It is well known that people never stop learning through their whole life.
It is often said that learning is a life-long process.

That is why leaving school is just another step to receiving new information using different methods.
After one has completed formal education, the learning and the acquiring of information continues but through different means.

Nowadays, people find more and more creative ways to educate themselves or to get educated.
Nowadays, there are many options available for people to seek continuing education and personal development.

Firstly, in the era of internet, the most easily accessible means for learning is receiving information online.
In this era of internet, the most convenient means of learning and obtaining information is to go online.

For that reason, online courses for learning foreign languages and adopting new skills are very popular among the modern people.
For example, there are online courses available for learning foreign languages and acquiring new skills, which have become very popular.

Such courses are organized for almost every fields of modern life – from how to use a modern technology device to how to overcome stress.
Such courses are available for almost every field – from learning how to use a modern device to how to overcome stress.

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[Matthew Wai]

It is often said that learning is life-long process.

'Process' is countable, so an article is missing.

 

[Matthew Wai]

"Learning does not finish when you leave school."

Leaving school is not the end of learning.

 

[tedmc]

Leaving school is not the end of learning.

I don't think the title needs to be changed. The emphasis is different - the original is on "learning" and not "leaving school".

 

[Matthew Wai]

Using a gerund phrase does not denote changing the emphasis.

 

[tedmc]

Using a gerund phrase does not denote changing the emphasis.

Changing the subject to an object does.

 

[Tarheel]

Ted, that's a pretty good analysis (post #2), but I would say the Internet.

 

[Matthew Wai]

Changing the subject to an object does.

There is actually no object because 'is' is a linking verb.

 

[tedmc]

There is actually no object because 'is' is a linking verb.

Whatever it is, there is a change of the subject,

 

[Matthew Wai]

Whatever it is, there is a change of the subject,

The emphasis remains unchanged.

 

[tedmc]

The second way in which people educate themselves after leaving school is the travelling and sightseeing.
Another way which people can gain knowledge and experience after leaving school is by travelling and sightseeing.

It is a very common [STRIKE]method for receiving new information[/STRIKE] way of learning new things and [STRIKE]for [/STRIKE]widening one’s knowledge about the world [STRIKE]history, geography, culture and economy[/STRIKE](I think there is much more) at the same time.

What is more, this is an active process which facilitates the ability of people to remember what they have seen and it is a great way to enrich one’s breadth of knowledge even after the end of their school education.
What's more, the real experience of being at a place is a great way to learn and broaden one's knowledge beyond what the schools teach.

Lastly, people widen their horizons by taking part in [STRIKE]different entertainment clubs. [/STRIKE] in activities of clubs and associations.

Sport or dance clubs are the [STRIKE]perfect[/STRIKE] ideal places for people [STRIKE]to know more about other people’s way of life; their points of view on different topics or to[/STRIKE] to socialise, interact, share knowledge and exchange ideas.

In this waypeople learn more about the communication between human beings outside the limited space that schools offer.
The interaction with fellow human beings promote learning and help in networking.

To summarise, there are ample opportunities for [STRIKE]learning and [/STRIKE] continuing education and development [STRIKE]about people[/STRIKE] after [STRIKE]they[/STRIKE] people have left school [STRIKE]are many[/STRIKE]. Taking online courses, travelling around the world and communicating with other people are great ways for us to learn more about the world [STRIKE]and the secrets it keeps[/STRIKE] and keep abreast of developments.