disconnection

[motico]

Is this sentence phrased well? Is the word "disconnection" in place?


Although nation A takes the liberty to slam nation B, humiliate it and provoke against it, nation A would not go so far as to bring about an irreversible disconnection from nation B.​

 

[emsr2d2]

Is this sentence phrased well? Is the word "disconnection" in place?


Although nation A takes the liberty to slam nation B, humiliate it and provoke against it, nation A would not go so far as to bring about an irreversible disconnection from nation B.​

Do you mean disconnection as in absolutely cutting off all ties with nation B?

 

[motico]

Yes.

 

[BobK]

Incidentally, you don't 'provoke against' anything. You provoke sb to do sth, or you behave provocatively towards them [not against].

A useful collocation for such a 'disconnection' is 'break off/sever* relations/ties'.

Note, only one e; pronounced /'sevǝ/

b

PS I've just noticed: 'takes the liberty to slam' sounds very odd on two counts - perhaps three:

• You 'take the liberty of doing sth'
• 'Slam' sounds very unusual, with 'nation' as an object
• 'Taking liberties', or 'taking the liberty' are acts of social reprehensibility: for example, kissing someone like a long-lost friend when you've only just met them is 'taking a liberty'.

 

[motico]

Incidentally, you don't 'provoke against' anything. You provoke sb to do sth, or you behave provocatively towards them [not against].

A useful collocation for such a 'disconnection' is 'break off/sever* relations/ties'.

Note, only one e; pronounced /'sevǝ/

b

PS I've just noticed: 'takes the liberty to slam' sounds very odd on two counts - perhaps three:

• You 'take the liberty of doing sth'
• 'Slam' sounds very unusual, with 'nation' as an object
• 'Taking liberties', or 'taking the liberty' are acts of social reprehensibility: for example, kissing someone like a long-lost friend when you've only just met them is 'taking a liberty'.

Please, tell me if this version is better:

Although nation A allows itself to criticize severely nation B, humiliate it and incite against it, nation A would not go so far as to cut off all ties with nation B.​

 

[emsr2d2]

Please, tell me if this version is better:

Although nation A allows itself to strongly criticize [STRIKE]severely[/STRIKE] nation B, humiliate it and incite ... against it, nation A would not go so far as to cut off all ties with nation B.​

You need a noun after "incite". For example "to incite hatred". You don't simply "incite against..."

I'm also not sure about "Nation A allows itself..." A nation cannot allow anything, it's an inanimate object. It's the people/politicians etc who actually criticise something, who could be considered Nation A. I've left it in for now.

Perhaps:

Although Nation A often criticises Nation B very strongly, and incites hatred towards it, Nation A would not go so far as to sever all ties with Nation B.

 

[BobK]

Please, tell me if this version is better:

Although nation A allows itself to criticize nation B severely [note new position] , humiliate it and incite against:?: it, nation A would not go so far as to cut off all ties with nation B.​

It's an improvement, and fine after the comma! But - in Br Eng at least - You "incite <noun>" (ex: violence, hatred...), or you "incite sb to do sth".

b